Campaign Challenge #1

The first Platform Building Campaign Challenge is to write a short story/flash fiction story in 200 words or less, excluding the title. It can be in any format, including a poem. Begin the story with the words, “The door swung open”.

The Escape

The door swung open, bounced off the rubber door stopper, and swung back, hitting the little girl in the face. “Oww!” she cried, rubbing the center of her forehead where the doorknob struck.

The boy stretched out on the bottom bunk gave no reaction and kept reading his book.

“Luuuuke!”

“Whaaaat?”

“You promised to play a game with me.”

“I’m busy.”

Stepping into the room, Lily asked, “What are you doing?”

Raising one dark eyebrow, Luke replied without looking up. “Duh! I’m reading.”

“Watcha’ reading?”

“A book.”

“Duh! What book?”

“You wouldn’t know it.”

“Maybe I would.” Lily sat lightly at the foot of Luke’s bed.

“It’s for big kids.”

“You’re not so big.”

Luke sighed. “I meant older kids.”

Footsteps stomped overhead. Looking up, Lily swallowed. “Hank’s home.”

“Yeah,” Luke said, finally glancing up from his book.

The children listened to the muffled sounds of slamming cabinets and swearing through the ceiling.

Luke moved over on his bed. “Come here, Lily.”

Lily crawled eagerly up the bed to lie beside her brother, who opened his book and read aloud, drowning out the noise from above.

Comforted by each other’s warmth, the children escaped into the world of Harry Potter.

25 thoughts on “Campaign Challenge #1

  1. This is so well done!
    I love the ending, the union of the children and the feeling of being protected… safe with her brother and a good story. It has just the right amount of sweetness to it.

  2. OH MY WORD….I LOVE, ABSOLUTELY LOVE YOUR NEW BLOG DESIGN! SEE, I AM WRITING IN ALL CAPS….SHOUTING OUT MY BLOGGIE LOVE!

    OK, on to your post…It is so sweet. I love Luke and his care for his sister.

  3. Congratulations, Brianna! Your flash fiction has been chosen to go on to stage two of the competition. There will be a semi-final (stage three) and a final (stage four). Good luck with the next stages.

    The relationship between the two was very well written – banter and comfort; a job well done in so few words (not to mention, I love that they’re reading HP!).

  4. You captured an innocent conflict between the kids and showed us how the conflict around them shaped them and made them unite at the end. A great piece of flash fiction.

  5. That’s really awesome the way you had the two kids bantering with each other, but then using each other as security at the end. What a great way to shake up expectations. Excellent dialogue, too!

    Great job, Brianna! :)

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